Paper that I have to write for school (about cannabis)

So I have a paper due for school tomorrow, just the 1st draft. It's supposed to be about an emerging technology. I have not cited my sources yet, I just finished typing it and wanted opinions.

Just a few points:
  1. 300 kids in class so I am limited to 1 page
  2. Professor asked that we keep fluff and filler sentences out ( I assume because she has to read min of 600 papers or more)
  3. Also I haven't cited sources, I quickly typed this out and posted for critisism, all replies appreciated and I will take no offense. I am including emoji's to illustrate this :weed:;);-)(::weed::P

Cannabigerols (CBG), Cannabichromenes (CBC), Cannabidiols (CBD), Delta 9-Tetrahydrocannabinols (THC), Cannabinol (CBN), and Cannabicycol (CBDL), Cannabielsoin (CBE), Cannabitriol (CBT) these are eight of the 480 compounds found within the cannabis plant. According to an Israeli scientist, Raphael Mechoulam who holds a nomination for the prestigious Rothschild Prize, Mechoulam, along with many other people in the scientific community believe all these components from the cannabis plant likely exert some therapeutic effect, more than any single compound alone. Due to the prohibition of cannabis, and the schedule 1 classification it has received, little to no research has been conducted in the United States on the therapeutic or medicinal effects that the cannabis plant offers.

“The Entourage Effect,” research shows that all of the compounds found within a cannabis plant work far better together than alone. The example I would like to use is Marinol, which is a synthesized version of THC. Marinol was introduced around 1985 to cancer patients to alleviate the negative symptoms of chemotherapy which is usually nausea, loss of appetite, vomiting, mood disorders, pain, sleep, and fatigue. Researchers hypothesized it would have the same effect as the whole cannabis plant. What was discovered and became apparently clear that all patients using Marinol actually preferred using the whole cannabis plant to taking just Marinol by itself. Scientists soon began to realize that all the compounds found within the cannabis plant has a synergistic effect known as the “Entourage Effect.” The most promising and the most controversial of the medicinal benefits of cannabis in cancer treatment is of the cancer itself. Preclinical studies supported the ability of cannabis to kill cancer cells and stop the disease from spreading, the medical community points out that human research is lacking. Studies in cell culture and animal models continue to show evidence of cancer fighting effects. The results are so compelling that it has led cancer organizations, such as National Cancer Institute, and Cancer Research UK to include large sections of their website dedicated to the role of cannabis and cannabinoids in fighting cancer.

Charlotte Figi of Colorado has “Dravets Syndrome,” a rare and severe form of epilepsy that causes severe seizures and death. She has been prescribed Valium, Ativan, and even Phenobarbital all of which can have a deadly overdose complication. Charlotte has straight line died several times; she was brought back to life with CPR. She had her first seizure at 3 months old, at the age of five years old Charlotte would suffer up to 300 seizures a week, almost two seizures an hour. She could not talk, or move, she was in a catatonic state. Her only option at this point is to consume a powerful veterinary drug for epileptic dogs, or be put in a medically induced coma so her brain and body could rest. She was at a point that her body was so frail that just one more seizure could kill her. Marijuana has two key ingredients, THC, and CBD. Due to lacking research scientists hypothesize that CBD modulates the electrical and chemical activity within the brain to help quiet the activity that causes seizures.

Charlotte had her first dose of medicine derived from CBD, after the first application an hour went by, then another, then another, and that day she received medicine derived from a CBD based cannabis plant, she had her first day without a seizure. Still in disbelief the Figg’s were astonished when Charlotte went days without one seizure, by this time she should would have experienced at least 100 seizures over a two day period. Charlotte went from having 300 seizures a week to having one a week. After 2 years on a feeding tube, she can now eat on her own, she can now talk, walk, and enjoy life as a normal 5 year old child should. Although some hospitals do not recognize cannabis and CBD as a treatment for “Dravets Syndrome,” it’s hard to argue with results that you witness with your own eyes. The other question I ask myself, is how can they make this statement when such little research has been done in regards to the therapeutic and medicinal effects of cannabis?

In conclusion, I do believe that cannabis has medicinal and therapeutic effect to humans. Our class has taught us that scientific experiments are built from previous experiments as a foundation, with results that we should be able to duplicate. Little to no research has been conducted in the United States on the medicinal effect of cannabis; most research conducted has been to show the negative side effects of cannabis because of the schedule 1 classification. The question I ask myself and you is have we been systematically misled to believe cannabis offers no medicinal value because of a political or monetary agenda?
 
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sunni

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thats your entire paper 4 paragraphs?o_O man i wanna go to your college

your opening sentence should be something else, like introduction to your topic before jumping right into
"Cannabigerols (CBG), Cannabichromenes (CBC), Cannabidiols (CBD), Delta 9-Tetrahydrocannabinols (THC), Cannabinol (CBN), and Cannabicycol (CBDL), Cannabielsoin (CBE), Cannabitriol (CBT) these are eight of the 480 compounds found within the cannabis plant. "
its too in your face punch right off the bat,

im not sure how your college works, so this could be wrong depending on your college, and how they do their writing or what they expect but its always best to speak not from person experience papers it shouldnt be "I WITNESSED", or "I THINK", or " I BELIEVE" or "I ASK MYSELF"
it should be "Experts have witnessed, " "Some doctors think"...
they usually dont want your opinion, even though its your paper they want just the facts and figures written in a way that persuades people to your opinion
 

caveman117

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I agree, when I had to write reports generally you want to have and opener, a thesis, x amount of supporting paragraphs, and closure. depending on what your writing it could be different.

ultimately you want to produce what the professor is looking for. so you may want to try to get a hold of them or review previous papers and look at what you did wrong/right.

also if you have notes that you may have taken about how professor explained the assignment you may be able to revise/re shape it. based on those notes.
 

sunni

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for the record anyone who ever did papers on cannabis never generally did well , unless it pertained to the actual subject matter on hand. like medicine papers for classes on such

next time dont go for something youre passionate about just because its easy to write about go for something that flows best with the subject matter.
I know that kinda sucks, but i could think of several better topics for emerging technology, but than again you didnt fully explain what the paper outlines were

also typically documentaries are subjective, and they dont do well as the whole main point of your citations and research
you want actual papers written by someone or something accredited (like harvard medical ) thats in hard proof facts UNLESS your paper is on a documentary you saw.
its harder for the professor to go watch the documentary when they have 100's of other papers to make sure youre citing properly and they do do it.
best to stick papers at them so they can quickly find it and read it
 

sunni

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oh just another quick thing
i dont see any paraphrasing because you didnt put your citations on. when i wrote up my papers, i would quickly jot down things if i paraphrase/or quote to make it easier when you do your citation pages afterwards, otherwise youre going to go blank and miss some paraphrasing

like uh example:

" weed is the medical cure of the 20th century said Dr. Sanjay Gupta" (CITE: PG 45 , HARVARD PAPER (TITLE OF PAPER) PARAGRAPH 5)
this way when i do my finished draft i can quickly find the actual citation i needed because now i remember the paper its from, the paragraph and the page it was on, so i will erase the shitty note cite for myself and do the proper one.
that way youre not scrambling to find all your paraphrasing or, quotes, or whatever it is you need to do.

You wanna make sure you really work hard because if you forget to cite something because you didnt make a rough draft note, you will be dinged for plagiarism and while in this case it was a simple fuck up in error ..the school will never look at it like that they can expel you instantly they dont care about your innocent mistake.

heres a really good website ot help you https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/ i used it alot in university along with my books
 
I was limited to 1 page. It's a class with 300 kids in it so I think the professor doesn't want to read 300 papers at 5-6 pages a piece. Yes I do agree with citing, I just typed it out and I am citing now.

It might not do well I realize because it's for school, but it's an emerging technology. I wrote that in an hour and just needed opinions. thanks.
 
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sunni

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I was limited to 1 page. It's a class with 300 kids in it so I think the professor doesn't want to read 300 papers at 5-6 pages a piece. Yes I do agree with citing, I just typed it out and I am citing now.

It might do well I realize because it's for school, but it's an emerging technology. I wrote that in an hour and just needed opinions. thanks.
ive done college 2 times and university once and recently as well, i have seen some good papers flop with them because of the subject matter being something like marijuana when they couldve used a different better example. sometimes dont go for the easy passionate route thats all aside from that i think i gave some really good pointers
 
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thats your entire paper 4 paragraphs?o_O man i wanna go to your college

your opening sentence should be something else, like introduction to your topic before jumping right into
"Cannabigerols (CBG), Cannabichromenes (CBC), Cannabidiols (CBD), Delta 9-Tetrahydrocannabinols (THC), Cannabinol (CBN), and Cannabicycol (CBDL), Cannabielsoin (CBE), Cannabitriol (CBT) these are eight of the 480 compounds found within the cannabis plant. "
its too in your face punch right off the bat,

im not sure how your college works, so this could be wrong depending on your college, and how they do their writing or what they expect but its always best to speak not from person experience papers it shouldnt be "I WITNESSED", or "I THINK", or " I BELIEVE" or "I ASK MYSELF"
it should be "Experts have witnessed, " "Some doctors think"...
they usually dont want your opinion, even though its your paper they want just the facts and figures written in a way that persuades people to your opinion
Going back to my other reply. This class has 300 kids in it, when she gave instructions to the paper she said not more than one page and not to include any fluff or filler sentences. That's why I went straight into it
 
ive done college 2 times and university once and recently as well, i have seen some good papers flop with them because of the subject matter being something like marijuana when they couldve used a different better example. sometimes dont go for the easy passionate route thats all aside from that i think i gave some really good pointers

you asked for opinions i gave , sorry if i offended, my intent is only to help you

I just replied to your thread. Not sure how I am showing any frustration, I'm just explaining a few points to the replies I just received.
 

sunni

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Going back to my other reply. This class has 300 kids in it, when she gave instructions to the paper she said not more than one page and not to include any fluff or filler sentences. That's why I went straight into it
alrighty got it,
maybe include all that extra stuff for us when you post in OP, you asked for opinions you given some that are on proper college writing. your teacher clearly doesnt care, and thats totally fine, but dont ask for opinions and than correct us on NO thats wrong when you werent specific in OP lol
it also wastes our time trying to help you when it isnt what you need
 
alrighty got it,
maybe include all that extra stuff for us when you post in OP, you asked for opinions you given some that are on proper college writing. your teacher clearly doesnt care, and thats totally fine, but dont ask for opinions and than correct us on NO thats wrong when you werent specific in OP lol
it also wastes our time trying to help you when it isnt what you need

Perhaps my replies were not interrupted correctly. I never corrected anyone, I explained why the paper was formatted the way it was along with it's length. I appreciate the replies as I am revising some stuff now.

But to be honest, your accusation of me being offended and throwing me back handed compliments like "your teacher doesn't clearly care." Not even sure why that is necessary. I think you just did not interrupt my replies correctly.

but dont ask for opinions and than correct us on NO thats wrong when you werent specific in OP lol
can you show me which reply contained this? I never said NO that's wrong, I simply clarrified, that all.
 

sunni

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Perhaps my replies were not interrupted correctly. I never corrected anyone, I explained why the paper was formatted the way it was along with it's length. I appreciate the replies as I am revising some stuff now.

But to be honest, your accusation of me being offended and throwing me back handed compliments like "your teacher doesn't clearly care." Not even sure why that is necessary. I think you just did not interrupt my replies correctly.

but dont ask for opinions and than correct us on NO thats wrong when you werent specific in OP lol
can you show me which reply contained this? I never said NO that's wrong, I simply clarrified, that all.
ugh omg.

all im saying is it wouldve been best you put up all those clarifications first so i didnt waste my time on helping you with things that were obsolete because your teacher doesnt want it done the proper way anyways
it wasnt a back handed comment sorry you feel that way

im done im unsubbing, have a good day
 
ugh omg.

all im saying is it wouldve been best you put up all those clarifications first so i didnt waste my time on helping you with things that were obsolete because your teacher doesnt want it done the proper way anyways
it wasnt a back handed comment sorry you feel that way

im done im unsubbing, have a good day

But you also made the accusation that I was offended by my replies. You're right I forgot to include the length and format, that's why I replied to the length and format for clarification, wasn't being frustrated or being offended.

If your going to call someone out for being offended you should be able to back up that statement. I'm sorry, but I feel you're just making baseless accusations. All of your replies contain sentences that can be perceived negatively. Thank you for your input and un-subbing.
 

BarnBuster

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proper sentence construction and syntax is what you're looking for . there are any number of college level books
that can help you. not something you learn overnight, takes years.
 
proper sentence construction and syntax is what you're looking for . there are any number of college level books
that can help you. not something you learn overnight, takes years.
care to pick apart one of my sentences and and offer how you might write it? Not trying to get smart but when you have another set of eyes looking at it helps to see my mistakes. TY (:
 
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