Need constructive critisism please

[timeismoney1]

My first song i put together. please be kind and leave any comments. and tips on how to improve thanks!

its pretty basic. next song im going to add more to integrate everything

http://tinypic.com/player.php?v=2h4e48z&s=7

I called it My Paradise. When i put it together the whole time it felt like i was being took away to a happy place i never want to leave so yeah enjoy

EDIT : Thanks everyone for the likes! Really pumps me up now If anyone is a bit interested to download it heres a link.

http://www.mediafire.com/?14zasgk17dh5rxt

 

[dirtsurfr]

I liked it I wish I had your talent.

 

[timeismoney1]

oh man im glad 1 person liked it i was a little nervous after listening to Dj Tiesto and Armin Van Buuren and Above and Beyond all the time, i felt it was crap. But there hella good at what they do and im starting off. Thanks!

 

[MediMary]

Can I just be a prick and pretend to offer advise while putting you down or are you only accepting constructive criticism?

 

[a mongo frog]

loved it. great tunes.

 

[timeismoney1]

Can I just be a prick and pretend to offer advise while putting you down or are you only accepting constructive criticism?

Well if ya didnt like it then let me know lol its a shame i cant please everyone

 

[DSB65]

Cool song.....

 

[MediMary]

I actually liked it

 

[ganjames]

i like it.

at first i just that it was alright but it got to the end and i caught myself jammin'
make some more, do a little mixtape and put that shit on itunes so i can jam in the whip.

 

[gfreeman]

heres some criticism. criticism is spelt with a C and not a S. there you have it. now construct!

 

[sike89]

Awesome, let me know when you finish another one!

 

[RyanTheRhino]

if you u are going to with this style of music you need to make it much more dub-step. if you want to make money dub step is the new club fad.[video=youtube;oZkzcm7ubQg]http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=oZkzcm7ubQg[/video]

 

[MountainManGanjaGrower]

nice man, I like it. it's the kind of music that makes you wanna just kick back, relax and chill

 

[canuckgrow]

sorry man made me wanna smash my puter speakers LOL......Glad you get enjoyment out of making a song though.....Give me a 12 minute guitar solo with some smashing drums and you will strike my chord.

 

[StonedGuru]

tbh I felt a build up but didnt get anywhere, need to break it down, drop in a base line, ramp it up, hardstyle baby! Musically wise though I think its pretty amazing, then again Im as musically talented as a brick.

 

[drew420fuckyou]

That was pretty neat man.